Okay,so I'm considering being an author and I need some ppl to judge my writting.I must warn you that this is a love story,it's not like twilight where it's a fairy tail "forbiden love",I just can't stand that(no offense twilight lovers).It does have some simalarities to Twilight,but very few.My spelling isn't good,in fact it's horrible but I need more than my friend at school to read it.It is long,so if you don't like reading,don't bother.If you're not interested,that's fine,but towards the end(if you get there) it would be worth it.After you read it please give me your honest opinion.Thank you.



Ch. 1
Love on first day?

"Rachel!"
I felt a push.
"Rachel,get up!"
I knew I was probably going to be late for my first day of school,but I was having a wonderful dream.
My father was home working on his car with me just talking about the parts.I have no idea why it was good but I didn't want it to end.
"Rachel,get up or I'll-"
I sighed,"Okay,I'm up!Just stop screeching!"I hated when my mom "threatened" me.
"Well,you don't want to be late do you?"she glared at me.
I waved her out of my room so I could get ready.
"Okay,now hurry up!I have a surprise for you."I heard her say.I watched her leave me room then ran to the closet.Fashion wasn't my thing and I knew it.
When I did try to dress nice,I looked like a clown.My closet wasn't full of name-brand things,even the stores they came from weren't name-brand.
I sighed and grabbed a green,long-sleeved shirt and some old jeans.
"Well,good enough..."I mumbled and threw them on.Then I looked at my hair.
It looked like a big,black mop.I ripped a brush through it which helped,then just grabbed a hat from my drawer.I snatched my stuff and dashed downstairs to see what the big surprise was.

"Finally!"my mom always thought I took forever to do things,"Follow me."She lead me into the shack,or what she called the "garage",behind our house and opened the door."Ta-da!"she beamed at me,"Well,what do you think?"
I tried to not laugh at the vehicle standing in front of me.It was a sky-blue mo-ped with a brown seat cover.I walked around it seeing if anything was wrong with it.I saw that a brake light was out and that the tailpipe was bent at a weird angle.
"Well?"my mom was on her heals waiting for me to go crazy over the mo-ped.
"Well...it's,um,"I had no idea how to say what I really felt w

friday,february 20th 2009...my dog Bunny was struck by a car.I was at school when it happened.My parents said when they went to the vet and saw her,it was horrible.They said that her back or spleen was broken,that her back legs were broken,that she didn't have the strength to lift her paw or sit up or even walk.They told me she had blood coming from her eyes and nose,and that the vet wanted 3,000 dollars to save her,and that we didn't have the money.I got in the car an they said they were sorry,but that she was in so much pain,and that they sent her to heaven.I cry as i type this,but I wrote this poem for her:

What a dog is 2/20/09

A dog is more than a pet,
A dog is a piece of your heart,
with each day it grows,
until it is your heart,

Bunny is,was,and always will be,
my heart.

I remember her golden fur,
soft ears,
velvet paws,
and short,adorable tail.

I will always think of her,
when she barked,
when she liked my tears away,
when she jumped over the fence...

When she jumped,
she always came home safe,
I wouldn't beat her,
I'd thank god she was alright,

This time she didn't come back,
This time I can't pet her,
This time I can't wait for her,
This time she didn't come back,
and she never will...

Crying won't bring her home,
Saying I'm sorry won't bring her home,
Calling her name won't bring her home,
Even whistling won't bring her home,
and nothing ever will...

Although she's gone,
my love for her still grows.

Nothing can take away that love,
because when you have a dog,
You don't have a pet,
you have a friend for life

No matter what happens,
Nothing can take away that love...


In loving memory of Bunny,
The greatest friend I could ever have,
and may god rest her soul.I know she's
in a better place now...
We love you girl!!!
R.I.P

Also,I dedicate the song "Afterlife" by Avenged Sevenfold to her...it helped me cope the day she was lost...

if they accepted this is how it would go

edward- bella i really really like you

bella- i like you too eddy! hehehehehe

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the meadow
edward- can i try something Belly
bella- of course eddy!
edward- ok HUG [hugs bella]
bella- oh that just tickled me pink!

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oh i got one charlie will be played by the actor that plays arwin in sweet life

Bella- daddy poo im dating edward cullen
charlie- huh gasp!
bella- we havent done anything!
chalie- you better not [film freezes and turns to camera] doing stuff could cause teenage pregnancy and STD's if protection is not used children go to your nearest drug store before hanging with your bfriend and ask ffr the cherry flavored protection kit and have a happy time
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cast list
edward- joe jonas
bella- miley cyrus
laurent- corbin bleu
james- lucas grabiel
emmet- zac efron
victoria- demi levatto
jacob- kevin jonas
jessica- Alyson stoner
BOTH BY,roxychick88
thanks!it's hillarious!!!
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The whole fight would go something like this:

Edward: You're a meanie, James!

James: *gives raspberry*

Edward: *turns to camera and the movie freezes* Kids, you should never act like this to anybody. If somebody is doing this to you, it's called bullying and we don't like bullying!
by,LadyMatthiaVon
also awesome!!!
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honeymoon scene
bella:edward,can you change me now?
edward:*gasp*Bella!no way!!!I'm not so sure charlie would like that...
bella:I DON'T CARE!!!YOU PROMISED!!!
edward:It might hurt you!!!and i can't see you like that...i'll lose control*sighs*I'm not that strong
bella:I gave you time!!!now change me!!!
edward: ok,ok...if thats what you want...*throws bella on couch and try's to take top shirt off(don't worry!she's wearing 3 shirts)*
bella:WHAT ARE YOU DOING!!!OW!!!
*shirt is too small,miley's head is too big*
edward:IT...WON'T...COME...OFF!!!
bella:i said to change me!not strip me!!!
edward:huh?i thought you ment your clothes...
moral:this is how stupid miley and joe are to act in REAL movies
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Rosalie:Emmet!!!Stop demolishing the houses that Es