Just a lStory ( please comment)

*As of 2013 honestly this is a dumb story i was like 10 when i wrote this and i am so sorry to anyone who suffered through this horrible piece of writing im only keeping this up so i can come back in a couple of years and laugh at myself*
Ali walked out of her village ashamed, dodging the things the villagers threw at her, trying to ignore them when they yelled "Trader!", but it was too hard she knew she had done a bad thing. She didn???t know why, she had done it, but it had happened and that was all that mattered! She was finally out of the village, and was heading toward the vampire castle. She new they would accept her but it was already to dark to be walking, so she stopped at a cave to rest for the night. She hoped she would be safe there.

She woke up to find that she had been robbed. All her money was gone, and they???d taken her food. All she that was left was her clothes, one fish and ten cents. She then turned around and said, "I have to reach the Vampire Castle today. It???s the only way I???ll be able to survive!" She packed her things, and started walking back to the road. Ali was hoping on the way she could earn a few bucks, or find some food. She just kept walking, and walking, in the hot sun until she was finally lost, confused, and VERY hot. She fell to the ground, passed out.

Ali woke up, to be in a house. She got up, and saw a woman. "Who are you? Where am I?" She asked, the woman didn???t answer, but she gave Ali some food, and a few dollars. She said, "Good luck on your journey." She pointed to the door, and Ali thanked her, and walked out of the door. She continued her journey to the vampire castle and she smiled. She had the strength now.

Ali couldn???t find a place to rest, so she just lay in the dirt and ate her fish. Once she was done, she rested so she could have strength for the next day.

Ali woke up, and continued on her journey. She stopped at a village to buy a map to the Vampire Castle. She bought it, and started to see were she was. She looked up and started to jump with joy! She was almost to the Kingdom!

Ali heard a noise and turned, to see a group of men starting to chase her. She screamed, and started to run. They yelled out, "Give us your food!" Ali kept running. Suddenly, the men turned around. She wondered what scared them, until she looked right in front of her. She had reached the Vampire Castle! She dragged herself to the steps, she was too tired, and she thanked the Gods for her safe journey. She knocked on the door, and a vampire answered. She looked at him and screamed, ???I want to be one of you!???
TO BE CONTINUED......